In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealth. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the society
last
few years, offspring have had Linking Words
increasingly
levels Change the adverb
increasing
on
becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people argue that the country has the responsibility to tackle Change preposition
of
this
issue. Linking Words
While
there is some truth to Linking Words
this
belief, Linking Words
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would disagree with Use synonyms
this
point of view for some sound reasons.
From one perspective, the Linking Words
government
has the respond to the Use synonyms
health
of younger generations. The main argument is that overeating causes children overweight Use synonyms
also
, and the Linking Words
government
should solve Use synonyms
this
issue. To explain, the Linking Words
government
has to ban unhealthy Use synonyms
foods
for juveniles or they do not need to produce and sell because Use synonyms
this
situation may be very damaging for young generations. Linking Words
As a result
, a reduced level becomes overweight among younger. Linking Words
For example
, some countries banned sugar goods, and fast Linking Words
foods
sold to the population. Use synonyms
Besides
that,Linking Words
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the
recommended
more walking, running and sports Wrong verb form
recommends
such
as these rules help to be healthy. If the USA had not banned selling some damaged Linking Words
foods
in their places, people would not have suffered from some diseases.
From another angle, the Use synonyms
government
does not have the responsibility to solve these issues because there are other matter problems than Use synonyms
this
condition. Linking Words
Moreover
, not only society fathers and mothers should respond to their Linking Words
health
or children's Use synonyms
health
problems. The Use synonyms
government
always can not observe overeating in their population. Use synonyms
However
, parents can help their boys and girls Linking Words
that is
they can have self-esteem Linking Words
as well as
younger ones . Linking Words
For instance
, Linking Words
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do not buy unhealthy goods because Use synonyms
l
know they damage Use synonyms
foods
Use synonyms
l
do not eat. Use synonyms
Consequently
, Linking Words
l
am not overweight among my friends. In a word, the society has not compulsory to tackle Use synonyms
this
problem.
In conclusion, the Linking Words
government
should ban some products for offspring and people do not need to overeat because Use synonyms
this
is very beneficial for their Linking Words
health
.Use synonyms
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