Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Some
people
admit that to prevent traffic problems and the high level of pollution Correct article usage
the governmnet
governmnet
should increase the Correct your spelling
government
price
of petrol. I strongly disagree with this
statement, because such
forceful
way would not work in a democratic country, Correct article usage
a forceful
hence
it most probably will cause disagreement among people
. Instead
, it would be better to create comfortable infrastructure to motivate people
change
from private to public Add the particle
to change
transport
.
If change of
the oil Change preposition
in
price
would be rapid and drastic then
more likely citizens would be against those changes. For instance
, individuals may start actively showing disagreement about political decissions
done by Correct your spelling
decisions
president
. Add an article
the president
Moreover
, most likely that would not decrease a
number of private Change the article
the
vehicales
, Correct your spelling
vehicles
hence
the problem itself is still present. Therefore
that desission
would have Correct your spelling
decision
negative
effect on Add an article
a negative
people
's mood
.
Fix the agreement mistake
moods
The
effective measure would be to build an Correct article usage
An
infratructure
for Correct your spelling
infrastructure
people
's need
. Fix the agreement mistake
needs
For instance
, in Amsterdam there is a bicycel's
road system that covers Change noun form
bicycel
whole
city, Change the article
the whole
therefore
that ecofriendly type of transport
dominates there. Furthermore
, infrastructure for public transport
is also
a core aspect to solve
traffic and pollution problems, Change preposition
of solving
therefore
new metro stations should be built.
In conclusion, people
most likely will be against of
the Change preposition
apply
price
of pertol
increase. Correct your spelling
petrol
Therefore
, it would be better be
solved by creating infrastructure Unnecessary verb
apply
to
ecological or public Change preposition
for
transport
, like bicycles, buses and metro. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement that the most optimal solution for a
traffic and pollution problems is Correct article usage
apply
the
petrol Correct article usage
a
price
increase,
because it would not work Remove the comma
apply
hence
there is
no conditions for Change the verb form
are
people
to change there
Replace the word
their
transport
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