Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Some
people
admit that to prevent traffic problems and the high level of pollution
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the governmnet
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governmnet
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government
should increase the
price
of petrol. I strongly disagree with
this
statement, because
such
forceful
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way would not work in a democratic country,
hence
it most probably will cause disagreement among
people
.
Instead
, it would be better to create comfortable infrastructure to motivate
people
change
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from private to public
transport
. If change
of
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the oil
price
would be rapid and drastic
then
more likely citizens would be against those changes.
For instance
, individuals may start actively showing disagreement about political
decissions
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decisions
done by
president
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the president
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.
Moreover
, most likely that would not decrease
a
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number of private
vehicales
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vehicles
,
hence
the problem itself is still present.
Therefore
that
desission
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decision
would have
negative
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a negative
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effect on
people
's
mood
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.
The
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effective measure would be to build an
infratructure
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infrastructure
for
people
's
need
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needs
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.
For instance
, in Amsterdam there is a
bicycel's
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bicycel
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road system that covers
whole
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the whole
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city,
therefore
that ecofriendly type of
transport
dominates there.
Furthermore
, infrastructure for public
transport
is
also
a core aspect
to solve
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of solving
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traffic and pollution problems,
therefore
new metro stations should be built. In conclusion,
people
most likely will be against
of
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the
price
of
pertol
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petrol
increase.
Therefore
, it would be better
be
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solved by creating infrastructure
to
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for
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ecological or public
transport
, like bicycles, buses and metro. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement that the most optimal solution for
a
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apply
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traffic and pollution problems is
the
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a
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petrol
price
increase
,
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because it would not work
hence
there
is
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are
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no conditions for
people
to change
there
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their
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transport
.
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