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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate
whether
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about whether
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 the authority should waive
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tuition free
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 for
the
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apply
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students regardless of financial condition . I partly side with
this
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 notion
due to
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 some understandable reason. On the one hand , it is vital that the authority waive
tuition
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fee
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 for learners. It may help to enhance the level of the workforce in the future .
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 , some developed countries
such
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 as Holland and Germany invest money in their
students'
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student's
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 education , making the workforce’s quality higher than other countries.
Consequently
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, it helps to develop
economic
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the economic
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 state in
2
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countries mentioned before. That the government makes the
tuition
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fee
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 with no cost plays an imperative role in education.
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,
while
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 the redeeming features of
tuition
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 waiving are widely acknowledged , its counterpart still lingers . Unlike the common belief that free education may elevate
workforces
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 quality , factually it may cause career-related problems .
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 , some leading companies
such
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 as Vingroup , Sun Group and FPT currently hire their employees depending on the degree from reputed colleges . If every student owns the same certificate as others , they can not have
advantage
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an advantage
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 over
and
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others and
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 have difficulties in showing their competence or gaining achievement .
As a result
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 , the job market becomes more
intensely
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 and leads to the rate of unemployment ever-increasing . It is unfair if the government does not levy the
tuition
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fee
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. In conclusion , every
students
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student
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 should be entitled to have access to colleges and abolishing
tuition
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fee
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 for them is
of
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apply
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the
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a
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 necessity but to some extent

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Structure & Clarity
Ensure your essay has a clear structure, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Additionally, strive to make each paragraph focus on a single main idea.
Connective Language
To enhance coherence, use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs smoothly.
Task Response
To better address the task, ensure that your response fully answers the question, giving a balanced view if you only partially agree. Include a direct statement of your opinion in both the introduction and conclusion.
Use of Examples
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Grammar & Vocabulary
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