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Writing Samples
Band 4

You have reccently moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all the communication there. Write a letter to your bank Branch. In this letter mention: -Where you have moved? -What problem are you facing regarding the bank's communication? -What do you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you
this
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 purpose about my communications with the
bank
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. I have recently moved
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to other
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other
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another
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place
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.
This
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place
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 is so far
to
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from
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 the
bank
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.
Moreover
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, my all communication and
address
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addresses
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related
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are related
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 to your
bank
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.
This
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 is a big issue. I have recently moved
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to other
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other
Correct quantifier usage
another
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city
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.
This
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city
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 is so far
to
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from
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 the
bank
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.
This
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place
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in
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is in
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city
Add an article
the city
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 centre. It is capital. I have
a
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an
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 issue. I am suffering to come and go to far distance. I want to the
bank
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 contacts
relate
Wrong verb form
related
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 to my
currently
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current
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 workplace. I am writing to you
in
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on
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this
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 aim.
Firstly
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, I
wanted
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wanted to
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 move to
other
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another place
other places
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place
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. By reason of, in
this
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city
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city,
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 there
are
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is
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 a lot of car sound and very much traffics.
Secondly
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, I forgot to contact the
bank
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.
However
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, If you could help me a bit, I would have solved these problems. I want to pass my all things to my new workplace from my old
bank
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. Yours faithfully, Jasur uktamov

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure clarity and relevance in each paragraph. Each paragraph should focus on a single aspect of your request or issue. Avoid mixing different ideas in one paragraph.
Coherence & Cohesion
Create a clear logical structure for your letter. Start with an introduction explaining why you are writing, followed by paragraphs each addressing a specific point, and conclude your letter properly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively, ensuring that each new main idea starts in a new paragraph. This helps in maintaining the flow and making your letter easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Clearly state the issue at the beginning of the letter, including the necessary details like your new address, the problem faced due to the address change, and your specific requests to the bank.
Task Achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. While your tone is generally appropriate, ensure consistency in formality and politeness.
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