Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. discuss both view and give your opinion

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It is often argued that it is more
advantageousto
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advantageous to
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choose a living in the
cities
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more healthy , even if it doesn't appeal to you at all.I completely disagree with
this
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opinion and
thiliving
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living
in
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village
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a village
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is much more healthy than
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in another
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another
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another city
other cities
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cities
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.  First of all, I believe that living in
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village
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a village
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gives
people
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a sense of relaxation and health that no
any
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apply
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city can guarantee. Even if someone is living in high quality infrastructure, but feels tensed and compromises with his conscience because no one
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wants
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want
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be far away from his family,
this
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person won't enjoy his life,
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pursuing one's interests will always bring pleasure and
feeling
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a feeling
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of satisfaction.
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, a lot of Omani
youner
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younger
leave their families in their
village
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not because of city is
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle but because of
job
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a job
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. Add a That's why it's more important to
living
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live
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in the
village
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that makes you happy than to look only at high infrastructure .
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, some
of
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people
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argue that living in
cities
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keeps you motivated and
more health
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healthy
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therefore
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leads
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leading
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to
a
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career growth.
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, there is a strong relation between living in
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and
healthylifstyle
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healthy lifestyle
.
People
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who love living in
cities
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can easily excel in to lifestyle of
cities
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and marge with the
people
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in
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. For
instanse
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instance
, some
of
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apply
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people
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travel from their
village
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to be rich.
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enduring years become one of the richer in Oman .
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, some of
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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to living in the
cities
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.  
To conclude
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, I personally believe life must balance either staying in the city or the countryside because
that is
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related to each other to supporting
people
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's lives forwards
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