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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart depicts the statistics of world illiteracy rates
according to
 different regions and
gender
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genders
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 in by
last
 year.
Overall
,
women
 in
in
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south Asia, Arab states and Sub-Saharan Africa are the highest illiterate compared to other regions, and developed
countries'
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countries
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 were estimated the most literate in the world. A more close look at the details, South Asia
was
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accounted for the highest illiterate region with 55
percent
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women
 and 35
percent
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 men, which was over 50
percent
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 higher percentages than developed countries.
Moreover
, Arabian states and Sub-Saharan states literacy rates presented nearly
same
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 with just over 48
percent
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 for
women
 and 28 for men. In terms of the lowest illiteracy rate was allocated for developed countries which was nearly 10 times lower than the second lowest bar graph (Latin American/Caribbean).
However
, the illiterate rate of
women
 in East Oceana
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 as 20
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,
the
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 rate of
men's
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men
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 lower than
Latin
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American
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America
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/
Caribbean's
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Caribbean
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,
with
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 around 8
percent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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