Many people believe that family has a greater influence on a child’s life and development than other factors like friends, TV, music and so on. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In various nations around the world, many people opine that families can impact and improve their kids more than other elements
such
as TV, music, friends and many more. I totally agree that parents affect Linking Words
of
their babies more than other individuals and more than other techniques. The following paragraphs will discuss my point of view.
To commence with the period which Change preposition
apply
children
can Use synonyms
effect
more is Wrong verb form
be affected
infant
stage. Correct article usage
the infant
In
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During
this
time babies spend Linking Words
long
time with their parents Change the article
a long
especially
their mothers, Add the comma(s)
, especially
thus
they learn Linking Words
verity
Correct your spelling
variety
things
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of things
such
as religion and culture Linking Words
with
the mother language. Change preposition
in
For instance
, babies in Oman learn how to speak and their religion from their parents before they connect with others.
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Further
strengthening views that mom and dad can punish or encourage their Linking Words
children
to do something or stop doing it. To illustrate, when Use synonyms
mother
sees a good Add an article
a mother
the mother
behavior
from her kids, she may give them a gift or at least encouraging words. Change the spelling
behaviour
For example
, if she notes a bad action Linking Words
appeares
from her Correct your spelling
appears
appeared
children
, she will advise them and if they repeat it again she could punish them.
In conclusion, despite friends and some technology Use synonyms
can
affect Correct pronoun usage
that can
Use synonyms
children
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children's
life
, I completely believe that family can impact their Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Use synonyms
children
Change noun form
children's
value
more than others.Correct subject-verb agreement
values
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