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Nowadays traffic congestion is a major issue.What do you think of this problem and what measures can be taken?

#traffic #congestion #measures
It is true that
traffic
congestion
 is a crucial obstacle today. There are many causes,
such
 as excessive car
production
 but there are
also
 several
solution
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solutions
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 that can be executed for
traffic
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the traffic
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congestion
 problem. In
this
 essay, I will explain
further
about
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why
traffic
congestion
 is a crucial obstacle today.
To begin
 with, excessive
vehicle
production
 by
vehicle
production
 companies could be the main reason
of
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traffic
congestion
 nowadays.
Firstly
, if every person in a city
buy
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buys
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 a
vehicle
 and
use
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uses
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 it, it will take more space if 50 people
using
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use
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the
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apply
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public
transport
.
Secondly
, the cause of
traffic
congestion
 is because many
car
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cars
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had
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have
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 parked
in
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on
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 both sides of the road and
make
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making
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 the road narrower.
Due to
 the excessive
vehicle
production
, there are some
solution
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solutions
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can
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that can
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 be executed to reduce
traffic
congestion
,
such
 as
government
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the government
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 can make a rule about progressive tax if a family have more than 2
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and
government
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the government
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 can develop more advanced and more convenient
for
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public
transport
, so people can choose public
transport
 than their own
vehicle
.
To conclude
,
this
 essay discussed about cause of
traffic
congestion
, like excessive
vehicle
production
 and the solution to it
are
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is
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 making a rule about progressive tax
about
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on
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 more than 2
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in a family and developing more
andvanced
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advanced
 and more convenient
for
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apply
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public
transport
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • gridlock
  • urbanization
  • vehicle ownership
  • infrastructure
  • public transport systems
  • air pollution
  • urban heat island effect
  • economic costs
  • lost productivity
  • quality of life
  • public transport promotion
  • carpooling
  • rideshare initiatives
  • traffic management
  • congestion charging
  • traffic light synchronization
  • road infrastructure
  • cycling
  • pedestrian zones
  • smart city technologies
  • real-time traffic monitoring
  • electric and hybrid vehicles
  • sustainability
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