The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The image illustrates the whole complex production of canned
apples
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, starting from the collecting to the despatch.
Overall
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,
process
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consists
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14 different steps that flow one after another, without any loops. The whole production may be divided into four main parts, first of all, collection, followed by preparation after that goes cooking stage, and
at the end
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departing. The process starts at a garden where
apples
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are hand
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hand picked
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from trees and after that transported to the future preparation. After that
apples
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washed
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are washed
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and filtered by the level of quality. The selected
apples
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sent
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to the peeling stage, which is followed by slicing. After preprocessing, starts canning step, at which
apples
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placed
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into cans. After that, packed
apples
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cooked
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and sterilized, at
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stage goods are almost ready
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the
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despatch.
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, before
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, cans should be properly
labeled
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and stored. The final step is delivering packed products to shops.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words apples with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • canning process
  • systematic nature
  • ripe apples
  • preservatives
  • sterilization
  • distribution
  • technology-intensive
  • longevity
  • quality control
  • packaging
  • hygiene standards
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