There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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very competitive

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, many argue that objects which are deemed non-academic

such

as cookery or physical education should be excluded from study programs.

However

, I strongly disagree with

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and believe that

children

should always take these courses as they will improve the kid's health to support other more academic subjects

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and that a lot of students actually enjoy non-academic subjects

Firstly

, taking part in physical education or cooking

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improves

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health to focus in school. Many studies have shown that

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, especially those with high intensity that

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outside, are extremely important for the healthy development of the nervous system.

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should or should not be eaten

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often taught in cooking classes, which will certainly support the pupil's health.

As a result

, without these

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classes, students are more prone to sickness and

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grades in mathematics, literature or physics will be negatively affected.

Secondly

, not all of the

children

want or should go to universities for degrees as

this

is not what they desire. A student may want to take a football class more than a

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course because he dreams of

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a football player. In

this

case, forcing the

children

to drop non-academic

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so that they may have a better chance

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into universities will reduce their motivation

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study.

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, numerous research

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shown that students achieve

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result

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when they are in

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state of flow,

in other words

, when they are doing what they like best. By letting the

children

try their best in these non-academic courses, they actually have

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chance of being

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in life. In conclusion,

although

most parents would like their

children

to be

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academically, removing non-academic courses

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the curriculum is a grave mistake. I firmly believe that we should let

children

do these activities at school

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because the kids will be both healthier and more successful.