The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.

The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.
The illustration depicts the whole production of
chocolate
bars and how the income from
this
divided
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among parts that
involved
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are involved
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into
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the process. The whole algorithm is complex and
have
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two
inputs
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points and three
seporate
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separate
outputs,
overall
, the process consists
from
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10 stages. It is evident from the data that, the price of a product mainly summarized of the ingredients cost and supermarkets part. The production starts from the grinding of cocoa bins, part of them
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are throwen
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throwen
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thrown
away,
while
the other half is a resource for cocoa liquor. To produce industrial
chocolate
ingridients
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ingredients
like liquor, sugar and cocoa butter should be mixed together. The price is divided between 5 categories. The most income from selling
chocolate
receive
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supermarkets, their part is more than
one third
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of
all
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the price.
On the other hand
,
chocolate
companies and farmers get 10 and 4
percent
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per cent
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respectfully
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. Other cost goes to taxes and ingredients.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultivation
  • harvesting
  • extraction
  • fermentation
  • drying
  • roasting
  • grinding
  • chocolate liquor
  • price distribution
  • stakeholders
  • retail price
  • environmental impact
  • social impact
  • deforestation
  • unfair labor practices
  • fair trade
  • organic farming
  • innovations
  • disease-resistant
  • sustainable production
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