The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

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The graph illustrates the people change in the U.S. state of Oregon in three different districts in

Columbia

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Yamhill

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and

Washington

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from 1940 to 2000.

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most

community

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communities

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were in

Washington

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and it had a significant rise from 1970 up to 2000. In 1940,

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the population

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population

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the population

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Columbia

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was around 28

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likewise

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Yamhill

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public was 30

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. In

Washington

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, residents were 75

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district had the highest community in the three counties of Oregon. In 1970,

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population

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the population

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Washington

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started to

signficant

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significant

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rise

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the citizens of

Columbia

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and

Yamhill

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slightly

jump to

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2000 the

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Washington

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ammounted

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amounted

to around 241

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besides

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Columbia

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and

Yamhill

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whose

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population

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populations

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amounted to only approximately 76

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and 90

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words columbia, yamhill, washington, population, thousand with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

123 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

population change
significant increase/decrease
growth rates
economic opportunities
migration patterns
environmental conditions
rapid growth/decline
industrial development
natural disasters
governmental policies
historical data
economic conditions
environmental sustainability
technological advancements
social implications
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environmental implications
infrastructure demands
natural resources
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The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

In some societies, more and more people are deciding to live alone. Why do you think this is? Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, parents prefer to teach children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of homeschooling outweigh the disadvantages?

Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that this is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both view points and give your opinion.

Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, while others disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your own opinion