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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is widely believed that no one is likely to purchase printed reading materials in the
future
due to
 the opportunity for everyone to read online easily without payment. Thanks
for
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 the advanced development of technology, plenty of
books
 will be uploaded by almost every
people
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person
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 to electronic devices connecting
with
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 the internet in the
future
.
Thus
, more and more
people
 are able to enjoy the convenience brought by these mobile
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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such
 as smartphones and e-book readers which can allow
people
 accessing
to
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free
books
 or magazines on some specific applications or websites. Because of
this
 feature, many
people
 will be likely to choose
reading
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to read
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 free news and e-
books
 online rather than pay for printed
books
 at bookstores.
For example
, there are a large number of reading websites like
Amazons
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Amazon
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 nowadays for
people
 to read some designated
books
 without paying money, and
this
 may be a welcoming trend during the next decades.
However
, as for
books
 with copyrights, it is sometimes difficult to copy or upload to websites, so
people
 have to buy them from
book shops
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 in order to read and gain knowledge.
Moreover
, some
people
 will be likely to maintain the
habits
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habit
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 of reading printed materials
bacause
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because
 they can take notes or just enjoy the fresh smell of ink which can make them feel
joyfull
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joyful
.
Although
people
 need to pay money to purchase newspapers or
books
 to access
to
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information
informations
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information
, they are likely to be attracted by the special feeling of holding and reading real
books
 in the library in the
future
 to escape from the exposure to
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screens
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screen
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 and stay in
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a tranquil
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tranquil
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 environment. In conclusion, some
people
 may tend to read free e-
books
 online from time to time in the
future
while
 there will
also
 be some
people
 who are willing to pay for printed
books
 to enjoy the happiness brought by papers.
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task achievement
Ensure a clear and direct response to the question in the introduction. Briefly state your opinion to immediately address the topic. For instance, you could open by affirming your position regarding the decline of printed publications due to digital access.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your essay's structure by clearly separating your paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, supported by examples or further explanation. This will improve readability and the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Incorporate more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to make your arguments more compelling. This can help to keep the reader engaged and strengthen your points.
task achievement
While you've used relevant examples, try to include more specific details or personal experiences to support your points. This can help to make your argument more convincing and relatable to the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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