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The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the median monthly price up and down of
three
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 metals Copper,Nickel and Zinc in 2014.
Overall
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,Copper and Nickel
prices
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 fell in the given period,
while
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 Zinc
prices
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 went up. On the one hand,Nickel
prices
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 started from 6% in January and significantly went down to -3% within June,which was the lowest point.After that,
prices
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 rose to minus one per cent and stayed there for the next
three
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 months.
Finally
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,
prices
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 ended the
year
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 on a positive note(1% increase),which was the lowest among all
three
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 metals.Copper started the
year
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 at 2 per cent and gradually went down to -.5% within four months,which was the lowest point.After that,it rose steadily and ended the
year
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 with an almost 2% increase rate.
On the other hand
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,Zinc
prices
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 started from 1% in January,which was the lowest among all and after February significantly went down and ended June at -1%,which was the lowest point.After that,
prices
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 rose to -.5% per cent and stayed there for the next
three
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 months.
Finally
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,
prices
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 ended the
year
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 on a positive note(2% increase) which was the highest among all.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, prices, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Volatility
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correlation
  • Economic factors
  • Speculate
  • Significant
  • Overall trend
  • Comparative analysis
  • Increase/decrease
  • Monthly change
  • Price movement
  • Stability/Instability
  • Speculative reasons
  • Global economic indicators
  • Commodities market
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Year-over-year analysis
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