With the advancement in healthcare and technology, people now have a longer lifespan. Some argue that the retirement age which is normally 60 to 65 years of age should be adjusted to 70 years or even higher. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? Give reason and example to state your stance

It is undoubtedly true that the emergence of technology has a significant bearing on almost every aspect of

people

's lives, including health. With

this

in mind,

while

the majority of seniors usually retire at the

age

of 60 to 65 years old, some

people

contend that there should be an adjustment to the retirement

age

requirement of up to 70 years.

Although

health constraints are no longer a concern

due to

technological advancement, I strongly disagree with

this

view because it could be seen as human exploitation and there will be massive shifts in the workforce regulations. First and foremost, raising the retirement

age

to 70 or even higher can lead to violations of employee and human rights. To illustrate, if older

people

were

imposed

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to be productive and spend all their

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for

work

, they could be at greater risk of suffering from

work

-related stress and depression.

This

is because there will be no longer a balance between

work

and life, and I believe something

that is

imposed could lead to less motivation and enthusiasm. If

this

regulation is enforced, older generations can no longer enjoy their personal lives with their friends and family or the experience of trying new hobbies, which I personally think is the right of every human being. Another implication

that is

possible if

this

approach was implemented is that the opportunity

of

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young

people

to choose the job they desire would be taken away. If old

people

still actively

work

at the

age

of 70 or higher, meaning that almost

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upper management

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would be filled by them,

this

could

also

hinder the company's growth. The reason for

this

is

because

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older generations lack

of

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technology skills and tend to stick with the conventional

work

culture.

As a result

, one's country's development may suffer. In conclusion, the retirement

age

of 60 to 65 years is already ideal for

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to devote themselves

for

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working. The consequences of psychological implications and cultural shifts in the job market and workplace should be taken into consideration before the implementation of

this

new regulation.