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The pie charts give information about why people in Great Britain had to visit museums in the years 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about why people in Great Britain had to visit museums in the years 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide details regarding reasons about people in England had to visit
museum
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museums
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 between two years (2000 and 2010).
Overall
, the charts show the purposes for visiting museums in 2000 and 2010. The purposes were to learn and gain knowledge,
to
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attend a special exhibit,
to
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spend time with friends and family,
to
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fill their travel schedules,
to
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buy
arts
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art
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 and
others
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other
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.
Kn
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In
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 2000, 43
percentage
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per cent
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 was to
learn
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learning
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 and
gaining
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gain
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 knowledge, 11
percentage
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was
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were
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 to
attend
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attending
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 special
exhibit
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exhibits
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, and, 13
percentage
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was
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were
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 to
spend
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spending
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 time with friends and family. 26
percentage
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 was to fill the travel schedule, buying
arts
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art
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 comprised
small
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a small
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percentage
 (2) and 5
percentage
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 was for other purposes.
On
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In
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 2010, learning and gaining knowledge took 42
percentage
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, 17
percentage was
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per cent
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 to
attend
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attending
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special
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the special
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exhibition
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exhibitions
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, 19
percentage was
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per cent
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 to
spend
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spending
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 time with friends and family, 11
percentage was
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per cent
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 to
fill
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filling
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 travel schedule
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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