Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people thinkk that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
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then
nowadays many recognized companies that produce and export many products with high
scope of warehouses and products have been created. Add an article
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However
, there have been many consequences and some people argue that local companies could dissapear
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disappear
due to
low revenues. I partially agree with this
statement because these are considered two different types of marketing and people purchase goods in both of them depending on what they are looking for.
Firstly
, many supermarkets and shopping stores, which are highly recognized, have shown facilites
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facilities
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due to
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consequence
this
, it represents high rates of sales and profits gained by big corporations.
However
, local establishments are still maintained owing to its
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their
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as:
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as well as
textures and flavours that are much more
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case
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For example
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Colombia,
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specific artisans have the principal recipe. Rephrase
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For
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government
polices
to maintain Correct your spelling
policies
this
regional production.
To sum up
, although
many goods are bought in supermarkets, small bussines
still represent Correct your spelling
businesses
high-competitiveness
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high competitiveness
due to
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specific Correct pronoun usage
their
attibutes
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attributes
As a consequence
, both types of markets are maintained and improved.Submitted by luciaagudelomotta on
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