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The table shows the data about average income for one person in dollar, 2 different ages; under 18 and over 60, and poor population in percentage in three states in US, namely in California, Utah and Florida

The table shows the data about average income for one person in dollar, 2 different ages; under 18 and over 60, and poor population in percentage in three states in US, namely in California, Utah and Florida
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The table shows the data about
average
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the average
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income
 for one
person
 in
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the dollar
a dollar
show examples
dollar
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dollars
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, 2 different ages; under 18 and over 60, and poor
population
 in percentage in three states in
US
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the US
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, namely
in
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apply
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California
,
Utah
 and
Florida
.
Overall
, the highest average
income
 per
person
 is in
California
 and
Florida
,
by contrast
, the rate of poor
population
 is the
least
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lowest
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 in
Utah
. It is
also
 clear that the percentage of hardworking
people
 is
the
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apply
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youngsters aged under 18 in
Utah among
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Utah's
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 three countries. Looking at the details, more young
people
, aged under 18, work in
Utah
, 28%,
while
 the highest rate of
people
 who work in their ages over 60 in
Florida
 is 23 %.
Comparing
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Compared
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 to the percentage of
this
 category for the state of
California
, the share for the most employed
people
 is 17% among
people
 aged under 18, whilst 13%
employees
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of employees
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 keep their working lifestyle
in
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apply
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after their 60s. Turning into average
income
 per
person
 and
population
 below
poverty
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the poverty
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 line, the staff who get the highest salary is in
California
 and
Florida
, 23.000 and 22.0000 US
dollar
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dollars
show examples
. Despite
of
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apply
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the high
income
 in
the
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apply
show examples
California
, the share of poor
people
 consists of 16% of the
population
, which is
most
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the most
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people
 among
three
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the three
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 states.
Although
 the salary is
lesser
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lower
show examples
 in
Utah
, 17.000 US
dollar
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dollars
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 per
person
, the proportion of the poor is
also
 the
least
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lowest
show examples
, 9%, there
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, person, population, california, utah, florida, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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