The table shows the data about average income for one person in dollar, 2 different ages; under 18 and over 60, and poor population in percentage in three states in US, namely in California, Utah and Florida
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The table shows the data about
average
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the average
income
for one person
in Add an article
the dollar
a dollar
dollar
, 2 different ages; under 18 and over 60, and poor Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
population
in percentage in three states in US
, namely Correct article usage
the US
in
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apply
California
, Utah
and Florida
.
Overall
, the highest average income
per person
is in California
and Florida
, by contrast
, the rate of poor population
is the least
in Correct word choice
lowest
Utah
. It is also
clear that the percentage of hardworking people
is the
youngsters aged under 18 in Correct article usage
apply
Utah among
three countries.
Looking at the details, more young Change preposition
Utah's
people
, aged under 18, work in Utah
, 28%, while
the highest rate of people
who work in their ages over 60 in Florida
is 23 %. Comparing
to the percentage of Wrong verb form
Compared
this
category for the state of California
, the share for the most employed people
is 17% among people
aged under 18, whilst 13% employees
keep their working lifestyle Change preposition
of employees
in
after their 60s.
Turning into average Change preposition
apply
income
per person
and population
below poverty
line, the staff who get the highest salary is in Add an article
the poverty
California
and Florida
, 23.000 and 22.0000 US dollar
. Despite Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
of
the high Change preposition
apply
income
in the
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apply
California
, the share of poor people
consists of 16% of the population
, which is most
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the most
people
among three
states. Correct article usage
the three
Although
the salary is lesser
in Correct word choice
lower
Utah
, 17.000 US dollar
per Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
person
, the proportion of the poor is also
the least
, 9%, thereCorrect word choice
lowest
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