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The charts below show the percentages of reader who preferred to read certain types of book at A&Z library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of reader who preferred to read certain types of book at A&Z library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graphs below give information about the proportion of the main
enjoy
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enjoyed
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 kinds of
book
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books
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 in
A&Z
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the A&Z
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 library in the period 2009.
It is clear that
 there are different
from
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apply
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preferred types of
reader
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readers
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 in
two
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the two
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 groups but
self help
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self-help
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books
 in both groups
was
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were
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 the highest
similarly
. In
first
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the first
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 group-which included people between 18 and 25 years old, the largest accounted for 58
percent
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per cent
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 belonged to
self help
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self-help
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books
,
following
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followed
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 was novels, biographies and science fiction
books
 with the percentages
peaked
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peaking
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 at 23, 10 and 9 respectively. In
other
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the other
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group
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groups
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 owned
people
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by people
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 from 26 to 34 years old,
although
self help
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self-help
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books
not
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were not
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taked
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taken
take
 up
a
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apply
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half, it was
a
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the
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 same trend as the 18-25 years old group with 42
percent
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per cent
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.
Whereas
 the kinds of novels,
biographies
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and biographies
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 showed
the
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apply
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figures more
10
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than 10
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percent
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per cent
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 with biographies
reached
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reaching
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the
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apply
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second at 31
percent
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per cent
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along with
 novels
was
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being
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 20
percent
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per cent
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, the science fiction
books
 were the only lower 10
percent
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per cent
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 at 7
percent
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per cent
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.
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