Some people think that children receive compulsory subjects in local schools, others prefer private schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, government
build
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is building
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new
schools
and people
study
in them Some people don'
t
like local
schools
because they are thinking. People aren'
t
studying
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in local
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local
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in local
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schools
. Local
schools
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are differences
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differences
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different
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and private
schools
. They are big and careful for Austin's. Teachers don'
t
don'
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apply
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t
took
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take
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money for
study
and you will
study
money. For different languages, I
am agreed
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agree
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that opinion is private
schools
prefer
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are preferred
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than
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to
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local
schools
Cause of they give
adjectively
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adjectives
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study
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to study
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for students. Definitely Our neighbor Child Go. Private
schools
and
and
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apply
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he said that
us
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our
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schools
are very comfortable for all of
studentsHe
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students
learned
english
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English
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, He took Certificate and he very happy when we go . Our grandparents and
grandmother's
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grandmothers
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study
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studied
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local
schools
and they are
know
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now
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studying well and they don'
t
lie they're Teachers In.Local
schools
are supported
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support
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all
of
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apply
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pupils so local
Schools
are
need
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needed
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for us. At the moment local
schools
aren'
t
studying us so
peoples
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people
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are
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apply
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don'
t
study
schools
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at schools
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. Unfortunately.
Schools
build are more than more. In conclusion, these
schools
are both of them
study
,
pleace
Correct your spelling
please
So we protect to them and
study
well.
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