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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients
The illustrated pie charts
depicts
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 the moderate quantity in normal repast of three kinds of nutrients
in
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which all are unhealthy if consumed much.
Overall
, the salt content in dinner is high and low in snacks and breakfast.
However
,
sucrose
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the sucrose
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 amount is lofty in snacks and shallow in early
meal
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meals
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. To embark, the sodium and saturated fat content is excessive in supper which is 43% and 37%
besides
 the sugar is
meager
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 in it which is 23%. The lunch consists of 29% of salt, 26% of fat, and 19% of sugar which is subsided when compared to other ingredients. The saline portion is merely 14% in goodies which
similar
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 to the breakfast. The solid fat is 21% in snackables
however
 the sugar content is highest in the same which is 42%.
On the other hand
, the
solified
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solidified
 fat and the fructose take
uniform
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a uniform
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 quantity in
morning
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the morning
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 meal which is 16%.
To conclude
, the brunch has the lowest part of all three nutrients.
Nonetheless
, the evening meal has the highest portion of all three
nutriments
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nutrients
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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