In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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modern technology Replace the word
advanced
force
humans to live in Change the verb form
forces
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imagination
world where they can think about Replace the word
imaginative
to live
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living
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believe
incomes
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income
be spend
on finding new Change the verb form
be spent
plant
for new life because other plants are rich Fix the agreement mistake
plants
with
natural resources.
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spent
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on
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greatly
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be rich
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resources
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as water, air and herb
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the new
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has easy to live extra and clean natural resources.
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environment
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has
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where we cannot Change to a plural noun
sides
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neglect
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plants
good
thing but there are no possibilities yet for living Add an article
a good
of
human life. We have to make sure that there will Change preposition
apply
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that there
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be
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planets
such
as Mars has life for living the
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apply
human
.
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humans
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, spending money on searching new plant
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plants
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habitats
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs clearer structure. Your introduction and conclusion are present but could be more explicitly defined with clear thesis statements and summaries. This will help provide a roadmap to your discussion.
coherence cohesion
Your main points need better development and clearer logic in their presentation. Consider using separate paragraphs to discuss each major point, ensuring each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that summarises the paragraph's main idea.
task achievement
Your response appears to partially address the task, but you need to more directly state your position regarding the extent to which you agree or disagree at the beginning. Incorporate a wider range of ideas and examples to fully respond to the prompt.
task achievement
Use relevant, specific examples to support your points. These examples make your arguments more convincing and your writing more engaging. Consider current research efforts, technological advancements, or historical analogies.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of spelling and grammar. Misuse can detract from the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Consider using the term 'planet' instead of 'plant' throughout your essay, as the latter significantly alters the intended meaning.
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