The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)
The line graph illustrates information about a person who lived in the United Kingdom and owned how many
cars
in a 30-year time period from 1975 to 2005.
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Overall
,the two Linking Words
car
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owners
and three Use synonyms
car
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owners
trend went high,Use synonyms
whereas
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owners
trend went low but 1 Use synonyms
car
owner fluctuated a bit but in the end remained the same.
On the one hand,no Use synonyms
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start the journey with below 45% and 45%,respectively.After a decade no Use synonyms
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showed a dramatic fall at 25%,but 1 Use synonyms
car
faced a steady fall(under 40%).Use synonyms
Furthermore
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line went down gradually and reached almost 23%,Use synonyms
while
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graph line got back to the previous position which was 45%.
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On the other hand
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and 3 Use synonyms
cars
start the journey with nearly 7% and under 5%,respectively.In 1985,2 Use synonyms
cars
reached around 15%,which is three times better than 3 Use synonyms
car
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owners
(5%).Use synonyms
Finally
,2 Linking Words
cars
ended the journey under 20%,Use synonyms
whereas
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car
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owners
finished the time period nearly 10%.Use synonyms
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