The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)
The line graph illustrates information about a person who lived in the United Kingdom and owned how many
cars
in a 30-year time period from 1975 to 2005.
Overall
,the two car
owners
and three car
owners
trend went high,whereas
no car
owners
trend went low but 1 car
owner fluctuated a bit but in the end remained the same.
On the one hand,no car
and 1 car
start the journey with below 45% and 45%,respectively.After a decade no car
showed a dramatic fall at 25%,but 1 car
faced a steady fall(under 40%).Furthermore
,no car
line went down gradually and reached almost 23%,while
one car
graph line got back to the previous position which was 45%.
On the other hand
,2 cars
and 3 cars
start the journey with nearly 7% and under 5%,respectively.In 1985,2 cars
reached around 15%,which is three times better than 3 car
owners
(5%).Finally
,2 cars
ended the journey under 20%,whereas
3 car
owners
finished the time period nearly 10%.Submitted by ashraftaukir on
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