The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)
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The line graph illustrates information about a person who lived in the United Kingdom and owned how many
cars
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in a 30-year time period from 1975 to 2005.
Overall
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,the two
car
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owners
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and three
car
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owners
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trend went high,
whereas
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no
car
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owners
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trend went low but 1
car
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owner fluctuated a bit but in the end remained the same. On the one hand,no
car
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and 1
car
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start the journey with below 45% and 45%,respectively.After a decade no
car
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showed a dramatic fall at 25%,but 1
car
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faced a steady fall(under 40%).
Furthermore
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,no
car
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line went down gradually and reached almost 23%,
while
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one
car
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graph line got back to the previous position which was 45%.
On the other hand
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,2
cars
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and 3
cars
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start the journey with nearly 7% and under 5%,respectively.In 1985,2
cars
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reached around 15%,which is three times better than 3
car
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owners
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(5%).
Finally
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,2
cars
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ended the journey under 20%,
whereas
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3
car
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owners
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finished the time period nearly 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, car, owners with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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