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You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for threemonths over the summer. Write a letter to the manager. Say what experience you have Ask what the work involves Enquire about conditions

#advertisement #work #hotel #threemonths #summer #manager #enquire #conditions
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why
l
 am addressing you is that
l
 want to inform a few
question
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 about your
a
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hotel
.
Besides
that
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this
work
 regarding
l
 have some experience and
also
l
 want to know
your
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yours
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 enquire. Well,
l
 am
student
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a student
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. I have seen
an
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promote
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 for part-time
work
 in your
a
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hotel
 for
threemonths
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three months
 over the summer. I was working as
cleaner
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 in a school
as well as
 in the city center
a
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hospital. I should
be
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work
 for my
accomadation
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accommodation
 and life. I
agree
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agree on
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 all hard
work
 because
l
 have
on
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this
work
 my skills.
Firstly
,
l
want
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won't
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 require to you. Your
a
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hotel
have
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 what is
work
. I want to know
this
 regarding some information. Where
situated in
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a
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the
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hotel
?
Moreover
, have you
enquire
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enquired
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 or
answer
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 about
situation
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the situation
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 to me?
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, it is about money or your rules to me. I totally agree to
part time
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work
 or your
enquires
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 because
l
 need to
work
. I hope you will
answers
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 all my
quetions
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questions
 regarding a
hotel
 and reply
my
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 letter as soon as possible. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Bakhriddinova Sitora
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Grammar & Punctuation
Ensure proper use of grammar and punctuation to enhance clarity and professional appearance. Frequent errors can significantly distract the reader and detract from the overall impression.
Task Response
Use specific examples and details about your previous experience to make your application more compelling. General statements are less effective.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a different aspect of your query or information. For instance, one paragraph for introduction and stating the purpose, one for your experience, another for inquiries about the job, and one for conditions and closing remarks.
Tone
Adopt a more formal tone appropriate for a job application. Avoid using informal phrases and contractions. Address the recipient properly and maintain a professional and polite tone throughout.
Task Achievement
Clarify your questions and make sure they are directly related to the job and your ability to perform it. Vague inquiries may not elicit the information you need.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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