Some says that sports play an important role in society. Others, however,think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, many
people
different sports
play and sports
extremely
important for some Add a missing verb
are extremely
people
and also
some think that it is nothing a lot of than a
free time. I agree with Correct article usage
apply
this
statement because sports
play an
superb role in Change the article
a
to
local Change preposition
apply
humans
.
Furthermore
, many people
believe sports
play it
is nothing more than Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
leisure time because most Correct article usage
apply
humans
the working
every Wrong verb form
work
day
. So, this
various Correct determiner usage
these
sports
play idleness for humans
especially for many young generation
. Change to a plural noun
generations
Besides
that, many people
study or work in my country and also
some persons
do not Replace the word
people
sports
play and they are think
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think
this
play extremely tedious. For instance
, many
countries Change preposition
in many
they
are different physical Correct pronoun usage
there
activity
for children and Fix the agreement mistake
activities
kid's
might get free time Change noun form
kids
this
play. So, some young humans
would do not physical activity
.
From one perspective, some say that sports
play an important role in society because some people
there are
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have
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
health
if Change preposition
with health
this
Correct determiner usage
these
humans
various
Add a missing verb
do various
sports
play every day
and also
they might very health
Replace the word
healthy
from
Change preposition
apply
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
people
. So, society believe
extremely important physical Change the verb form
believes
activity
for many humans
. In addition
sports
should for our life and also
some people
might sports
play in the morning. For example
my close friend she
was very Correct pronoun usage
apply
illed
after she Correct your spelling
ill
is
different Verb problem
played
sports
play every day
. One day
my friend recover
from Wrong verb form
recovered
Ill
and Replace the word
illness
also
she is very health
now.Replace the word
healthy
Moreover
, physical activity
benefits for
Change preposition
apply
health
.
In conclusion, many people
should physical
exercise every morning. I think Change the word
physically
sports
important role in society and to
Change preposition
in
people
. Besides
that, some people
think that playing sports
is simply an activity
people
do for leisure. Personally, I believe very important sports
play in my life and also
especially should to some young people
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