Some says that sports play an important role in society. Others, however,think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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free time. I agree with
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local
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play
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is nothing more than
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leisure time because most
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every
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various
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play idleness for
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study or work in my country and
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some
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do not
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play extremely tedious.
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countries
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are different physical
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activity
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activities
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for children and
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kids
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might get free time
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play. So, some young
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play an important role in society because some
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problem
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health
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if
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humans
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various
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sports
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play every
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and
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they might very
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all
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people
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extremely important physical
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sports
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some
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play in the morning.
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my close friend
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was very
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ill
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different
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play every
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my friend
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illness
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she is very
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health
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now.
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, physical
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benefits
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health
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. In conclusion, many
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should
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physically
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exercise every morning. I think
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important role in society and
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people
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that, some
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think that playing
sports
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is simply an
activity
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people
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do for leisure. Personally, I believe very important
sports
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play in my life and
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especially should to some young
people
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