At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays several countries have
the
really big difference between amounts of aged and Correct article usage
a
youthful
humans. There are some benefits and losses in Correct word choice
young
this
case. No doubt, that a huge quantity of blood is the pledge of Linking Words
Correct article usage
a nation
nation
existence. Change noun form
nation's
Otherwise
, the minimum of pensioners means that medicine doesn’t work.
The main advantage Linking Words
to have
a developed Change preposition
of having
economics
is a young population. They allow the state’s life system to function at full capacity. In accordance with the above, if the country has Replace the word
economy
got
a good demography it has Verb problem
apply
got
Verb problem
apply
the
own future. Change the word
its
For example
, The Russian Federation has Linking Words
big
problem Add an article
a big
at
Change preposition
in
this
part; the natural population decline is higher than its natural growth. The government had to provide special programs to support families which have several children. Despite Linking Words
this
, I believe that everyone will become mature in Linking Words
a
one day.
Time passes continuously and constantly, Correct article usage
apply
all
of us want to promote healthy ageing for a long life. There is no health without Correct word choice
and all
a
good medicine; especially it is important for aged people Correct article usage
apply
which
have given Correct pronoun usage
who
the
debt Correct article usage
apply
for
the Motherland. Of course, it’s their right to have highly qualified medical care. If the government can’t provide Change preposition
to
this
need, it will be doomed. Linking Words
For example
, Linking Words
at
Change preposition
in
early
Correct article usage
the early
1990’s
lots of families Change noun form
1990
have
emigrated from Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Kazakhstan by Correct article usage
apply
this
case. I am sure that situation will not appear again.
In conclusion, Linking Words
although
young adults can improve their ability to make Linking Words
future
of the state, Correct article usage
the future
but
without Remove the conjunction
apply
a
normal healthcare Remove the article
apply
from
Change preposition
apply
it
, there are no perspectives. A government should Correct pronoun usage
apply
therefore
Linking Words
has
in Change the verb form
have
at
the country.Change preposition
apply
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite