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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented illustrations demonstrate the
lay out
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layout
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 of the Islip town
center
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centre
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 nowadays and how it will change in
next
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the next
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 few years.
It is clear that
 significant changes will be made in
term
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terms
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 of the use of space in the town. There will be a completely new dual carriageway and road for pedestrians only. At present, citizens use the main road to drive only.
However
, the plan is to develop
new
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 area for two new housing. In place of the shops, which are shown on the North side of the existing plan, the new town plan shows a Shopping
center
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centre
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 with a Car park and a Bus station. The permanent park space in the redeveloped Southeastern part of the township will be about 4
time
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times
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 less
as
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than
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 it
now
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is now
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, because
it’s
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its
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 terrain will be used for
a residential buildings
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residential buildings
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. There will
also
 be a reconstruction
for
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of
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 a school
according
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apply
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to accommodate more pupils from
a
Correct article usage
the
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 new houses. It’s shown in the
South
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Southern
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 part of the chart.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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