In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages of renting a home? Should governments subsidies house prices for first home buyers?

In most of
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, a lot of societies give priority to
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rental
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home
instead
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in
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. And of course, there are some benefits of
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it.
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states
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encourage
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. In
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, I will discuss
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all of these.
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, with increasing economic problems in the world, individuals who preparing to start a new life, are choosing to hire a home preferably have
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. Because
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, to buy it, you need
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a lot of cash money.
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,
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is not possible in today's conditions. So that's why,
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families
choose
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this
method. In
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, with the changing mental structure,
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does not want to have anything, wants to travel, see new places and be unattached. Actually, that might be why they are doing
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this
.
Nevertheless
, of course, leasehold places will have negative aspects. When we look at it broadly,
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the long run, we'll pay more than owning. Despite all these, folks who are tenants have the freedom to live wherever they want and for as
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as they want. It is the most important
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for happy life and
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positive aspect. In my opinion, states need to support to
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who wants to purchase for their beginning residence. If they do so, they will contribute significantly to the development of the city. In conclusion, we can not say any
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about
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discussion. Everyone can do anything about their
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, and everyone is free
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choices. I guess, the biggest role of the administration is to support its folks in the lives they want.
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