Stress related illness are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this. What is solution can you suggest?
Illness
is most
common thing Correct article usage
the most
especially
in the Add the comma(s)
, especially
streets
. There are many causes as well as
solutions are
available which will be analysed in the subsequent paragraphs.
Unnecessary verb
apply
To begin
with, the amount
of sick Change the quantifier
number
people
in
Change preposition
on
streets
Correct article usage
the streets
are
most common Correct subject-verb agreement
is
because
the Add the preposition
because of
hygiene
problems. To explain it, in streets
Add a comma
streets,
people
throw their garbage anywhere and this
is the main problem for increasing bacteria and harmful viruses which brings
sickness. Correct subject-verb agreement
bring
For instance
, in the
western countries many of the Correct article usage
apply
people
who live in
Change preposition
on
street
sides Correct article usage
the street
they
are sick because they do not follow the proper hygienic lifestyle. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Thus
, illness
occurred in streets
.
Correct article usage
the streets
However
, there are also
solution
Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
avilable
to mitigate Correct your spelling
available
illness
ratio Correct article usage
the illness
such
as,
Remove the comma
apply
government
Add an article
the government
should clean
the Wrong verb form
cleaning
streets
in
Change preposition
on
daily
Correct article usage
a daily
basis
. To elaborate it
, in many downtown Correct pronoun usage
apply
street
where Change to a plural noun
streets
government
not
clean Change the verb form
does not
did not
it
once Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
Change preposition
apply
the
month, so Correct article usage
a
government
should maintain the
Correct article usage
apply
hygiene
in
Change preposition
on
daily
Correct article usage
a daily
basis
it is Correct article usage
the government
government
responsibility to clean the Change noun form
government's
streets
. If government
clear it Correct article usage
the government
in
Change preposition
on
daily
Add an article
a daily
basis
so
Correct word choice
apply
hygiene
will be maintain
and the Change the verb form
be maintained
illness
problem would be
decrease in Unnecessary verb
apply
streets
. Correct article usage
the streets
Therefore
, daily clean the streets
garbage is the solution for Change noun form
street's
streets'
mainten
Correct your spelling
maintain
hygiene
.
In conclusion, many people
believe that illness
is most
common thing Correct article usage
the most
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
in
Change preposition
on
streets
because of hygiene
problems, but there are some solution
available Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
for
solve Change preposition
to
this
problem such
as,
Remove the comma
apply
government
should be clean the streets
in
Change preposition
on
daily
Correct article usage
a daily
basis
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