The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph depicts the percentage of expenditure accounted for how much weekly income by families in one state in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
the whole consumption was
catagorized
Correct your spelling
categorised
into eight
part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts
show examples
- housing, transport and leisure increased; food, fuel and power and clothing and
footware
Correct your spelling
footwear
experienced diminishment; the others remained the same. food was the largest proportion of weekly spending,
while
Linking Words
fuel and power was the smallest in 1968. Looking at the diagram in more detail, by the year 1968, the three basic commodities for our daily lives, like food, energy and garment,
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
the top three, which were 35%, 10% and 10%, respectively. In 2018, people got richer than before,
therefore
Linking Words
the figure for these three life's
essential
Fix the agreement mistake
essentials
show examples
plummeted to around 17%, 3% and 5%.
By contrast
Linking Words
, by 2018, because of inflation, people needed to spend more on the cost of living and driving, which were almost 19% and 14%,
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
two times higher than before.
As well as
Linking Words
the economic recovery, folks had more exceptional money to pay for their interest and hobbies
such
Linking Words
as household goods and leisure, the former was 10% as before, and the latter was 22 %, which rocketed from merely 8%.
Submitted by Joanna on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
What to do next:
Look at other essays: