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Many teachers assign homework to student every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students?

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Nowadays a lot of students have to do homework
everyday
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 during their education. In my opinion, it is necessary for them because it is an effective approach to
practice
 daily making
a
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systematic progress.
Also
,
this
 way they develop their discipline of doing useful tasks.   Most undergraduates do not enjoy doing study
routine
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 because it is not entertaining for them.
However
, it is a successful method to achieve high results in some
subject
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. If students gradually
practice
 by doing daily tasks, they will not have to learn some information rapidly before their exams.
This
 vital approach was made by teachers to reach high results among undergraduates making progress step by step.
For example
, my classmates always try to
practice
 daily and it helps them to pass exams with flying colours. Without any work during the education, it can be difficult to deal with a lot of information before control tests.  
Furthermore
,
persons
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, who make themselves do homework
everyday
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, can make
this
 routine
as
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a habit. If students do it, they will improve their discipline
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implementation
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 some plans. It can help to succeed in certain
subject
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 without too much effort. The sooner they start making it a habit, the
much more
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easier it will be to
practice
 regularly in the future, achieving better results. As my experience shows, being well-disciplined
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 to thrive on passing exams with high grades.   In conclusion, it is necessary for undergraduates to do daily homework because it helps them to
practice
 and develop their discipline.
This
 approach was made for
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 study process.
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