The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
This
bar graph provides data regarding the preference
of
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three types of
coffee
and tea consumption in different five cities in
Austraila
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Australia
.
Overall
,
to purchase
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fresh
coffee
was the lowest common type and the ratio recorded under 50% in
the
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all of the cities,
whereas
visiting
cafe
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cafes
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was the highest except for
Adelaide
. To start with, the figure
of
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getting to a cafe shows almost over 50%. To be specific, Hobart and
Melourne
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Melbourne
ranked
the
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first,
recorded
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same
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amount with nearly 63% during 4 weeks.
To the
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next,
Sydney ran behind with 61%, followed by
brisbane
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Brisbane
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and
Adelaide
to
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with
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approximately 56% and 49% respectively. Following that, in
case
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the case
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of buying
to
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apply
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instant
coffee
illustrates
similar
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a similar
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percentage in every
cities
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city
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. Hobart was placed
first,
recording 54% and
Adelaide
reveal
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about 50%.
Lastly
, the graph demonstrates the proportion of
persuing
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pursuing
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the
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fresh
coffee
. Sydney and Melbourne recorded
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with
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around 44% and 42% each, following Hobart with 38% which
almost
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twice as much as the other types.
Birsbane
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Brisbane
and
Adelaide
was
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the lowest-ranking, recording
same
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ratio to be
exact
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34%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "first, ".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, adelaide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee consumption
  • tea consumption
  • shopping habits
  • demographic factors
  • preference trends
  • price sensitivity
  • convenience
  • per capita
  • restaurateurs
  • beverage industry
  • consumer behavior
  • market analysis
  • quantitative data
  • qualitative analysis
  • trend analysis
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • seasonal variations
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