Some people say it is better to be unemployed than work in a job you dislike? Do you agree oelr disagree
Nowadays, most
people
need to work hard and stressful Use synonyms
job
, Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
such
as accounting and waitressing. Linking Words
Therefore
, some Linking Words
people
think that Use synonyms
some
Correct quantifier usage
apply
people
think that Use synonyms
unemployment
is more good to individuals rather Use synonyms
that
Correct word choice
than
work
in Wrong verb form
working
difficult
job. I totally disagree with stopping hard Add an article
a difficult
jobs
and Use synonyms
live
without working.
Wrong verb form
living
To begin
with, the prominent reason why Linking Words
unemployment
Use synonyms
is
Verb problem
has
adverse
impact Add an article
the adverse
an adverse
to
Change preposition
on
people
is that it leads Use synonyms
people
to Use synonyms
unsuccessful
in their careers. As a matter of fact Add a missing verb
be unsuccessful
that
Correct word choice
apply
people
cannot achieveUse synonyms
,
if they avoid Remove the comma
apply
from
difficulties namely hard and annoying Change preposition
apply
jobs
. Use synonyms
For example
, 75% of young Linking Words
people
in Turkey experienced an unsuccessful story with resigning Use synonyms
their
affordable Change preposition
from their
jobs
. They were not able to find Use synonyms
an easy and comfortable
Correct the article-noun agreement
an easy and comfortable job
easy and comfortable jobs
jobs
. Use synonyms
As a result
, they could not obtain an achievement in their career life.
Another negative effect of resigning annoying Linking Words
jobs
and living without working is that it is Use synonyms
due to
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Correct article usage
an increase
increase
economic crisis in a country. Wrong verb form
increased
This
is because Linking Words
Use synonyms
unemployment
rate is a very fundamental factor for measuring Add an article
the unemployment
economic
situation. Correct article usage
the economic
Hence
, if it Linking Words
growth
in a state, the economic crisis would increase. Replace the word
grows
For example
, in 2020, Linking Words
Use synonyms
unemployment
rate Add an article
the unemployment
was
increased by resigning Unnecessary verb
apply
people
from their Use synonyms
difficulties
occupations in Egypt. Replace the word
difficult
Consequently
, the country had a decline in economy.
In conclusion, Linking Words
although
living without working is stressful Linking Words
Use synonyms
jobs
is entertainment, Fix the agreement mistake
job
still
it has more potential drawbacks. Add a comma
still,
Reasons
mentioned above Correct article usage
The reasons
supports
to Change the verb form
support
continue
in any Wrong verb form
continuing
Use synonyms
jobs
is more helpful to employers by avoiding from unsuccessful life in the career and influencing to economic crisis.Fix the agreement mistake
job
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