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In the future,nobody will buy printed paper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #nobody #paper #books
I know ,there are different
opinion
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 between the people but I think both of them are good because paper and
book
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books
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 have nostalgia when we
are touch
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 a
book
feel
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and feel
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 good another side
the
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 world is
expending ever
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expanding every
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 day , hour and second so we have to follow that because we will have an easier life and we can prevent the destruction of forests so we need a world with forests and I agree
use
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a
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 online
book
 . We know a
book
 is the best friend
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human
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humans
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 and
create
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creates
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 a new vision for man but
for
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to
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 make a
book
 we have to cut a lot of
tree
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 and destroy a forest .most of
the
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people
cant
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can't
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 buy a
book
 or
paying
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pay
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 just
middle
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the middle
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 class and
prosperous
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 class can
use
 it . I can say it was not available to everyone so it was a social problem
.but
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but
 now technology
solve
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this
 difficulty.
Now a day
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Nowadays
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, every
people
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person
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 can
use
a
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an
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 online
book
 and can read a
book
with out
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without
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 paying
anything
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for anything
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. They can know about every news
in
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throughout the world and read new articles
.another
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Another
 side
that is
 an important issue for human life that can keep
environment
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 .it is
a
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 best invention for human evolution because we can learn
faster
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new
thing
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things
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 and we make our
mind
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minds
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 more dynamic. So
firstly
 I
suggestion
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read
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reading
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book
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a book
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 every time
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every
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everywhere
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where
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everywhere
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 in every situation and
cultivate
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 your mind
secondly
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use
a
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an
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 online
book
 or paper and recommend that
for
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to
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 our family and
friend
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friends
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 and try to developing our reading.
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