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full time university students spend a lot of time studying.some say they should do other activities too.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#time #university #students #say #activities
many college pupils tend to spend excessive time
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studying,
while
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arguments
 that these
indiviuals
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individuals
 ought to implement several jobs or hobbies.
this
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agree
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 that the experiences from
life
's
activties
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activities
 can make these
students
 more mature and possess lots of
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surrounds
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. many
students
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life
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in other words
, the
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majority
sterms
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stems
storms
terms
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failure or the perception of true or wrong, thanks to
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 of
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 many tough challenges for people to overcome and
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 the
students
to
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 adults.
subsequently
, these teenagers gain useful experience that not only assist in study but
also
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these student
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 in comprehending
life
.
for instance
,
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 of UK prestigious
university
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 have extra curriculums that force
students
 to engage in, and many comments state that the
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activities
activites
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activities
 help
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sophisticated
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sophisticated
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obstacles without intimidated the supportive concern point
that
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lesson
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 in the progress of studying and doing part-time activities. during the process. these
students
 definitely get
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to
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 many types of people,
this
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 leads to salient lessons from these people and teenagers utilize
for
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them for
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own
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goal
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.
also
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 the
unversity
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university
 pupils enforce
a lots
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 of duties in the curriculum, they have to confront hardship matters and the
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post-knowledge
post-knowledges
 can be gained from here. namely, because of unsustainable living
standard
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 in Vietnam, most of the
full time
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students
 in higher education are forced to carry out part-time jobs,
this
 concept consists of necessary lessons in
life
 and
also
 for the
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theoretical
 class in
the
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school. in conclusion, it can not be denied that abundant
of
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benefits
have
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 from the activities during the college course
such
 as the majority of implant experiences and the growth slowly
forms
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 in
students
' mental.
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general
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coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence, connect your ideas using transitional phrases and ensure that there is a logical flow from one paragraph to the next.
general
Check your essay for errors in word choice and spelling that could confuse readers or alter the intended meaning of your sentences.

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