The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
that
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how frequently
people
in the USA ate in fast
food
restaurants between
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the year
a year
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year
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years
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of
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2003, 2006 and 2013. There are 6 categories represented: eating
everyday
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, several times a
week
, once a
week
, once or twice a month, a few times a
year
, and never. In 2003, the highest
percentage
of
frequency
of eating fast
food
is almost 30%, and
people
eating
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fast
food
once a
week
.
Besides
, eating
everyday
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every day
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shows the lowest
percentage
, which is at under 5%, and it is similar to
percentage
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the percentage
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of
people
who never ate fast
food
, which
at
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is at
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5%. In 2006, the
percentage
of
frequency
that
people
who
eating
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eat
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fast
food
once a
week
, over 30%, is the highest number.
On the other hand
, both the lowest and another lowest
percentage
of
people
who ate fast
food
everyday
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, and never ate them show under 5%. In 2013, unlike
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the year
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year
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years
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of
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2003 and 2006, the highest
percentage
of
frequency
eating at fast
food
restaurants is that eating fast
food
once or twice a month.
Besides
, the lowest
percentage
of
frequency
is
same
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the same
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as
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the year
a year
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year
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years
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of
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2003 and 2006.
Overall
,
people
who ate in fast
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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tend
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tended
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to increase between 2003 and 2006.
However
, the data suggest that
people
were inclined to reduce
absorb
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the consumption of
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fast
food
in 2013.
This
assumes that
people
realized
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realise
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that
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the increasing importance of
taking
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eating
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healthy foods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, year, week, percentage, frequency with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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