Many young people nowadays choose to remain unmarried. Why are people doing this? Is this a positive or negative development?
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reasons
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negatives
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people
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instead
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come
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this
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benefit
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the benefit
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people who
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do not
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economy
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the economy
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and goods
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promote
commercial
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commercials
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decreased
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children
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. The dreary pospect of their country will occur the same Correct your spelling
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and not enough labour for working.
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people
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