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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.  In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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Nowadays, learning
English
 at schools is often seen as more important than learning other valuable
languages
. In my opinion, it is correct that students are learning
English
firstly
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 because, in my mind,
this
 is one of the most valuable
languages
 in the world.
Also
,
people
 can study any language they want, if they will need it. Maybe they will enter the university of another country and they will start to learn new ones. First of all,
people
 will not use these local
languages
 in the future. If they do not need it, they will not use it anyway so it is a bit incorrect in some way to learn it without any reason. In my opinion, they basically must learn
English
 because it is one of the most important
languages
 in the world. You will need it
while
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 you
will
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apply for some organizations, jobs, etc. Generally, most
of
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European or Asian
people
 speak
English
 so
this
 language helps you when you
will be
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 in any of these countries.
On the other hand
,
people
 must learn some other
languages
 for sure.
Firstly
, it makes your brain
to
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work harder to gain more knowledge. Respectively, you can be
highly
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 educated person. The second reason is that many companies have strict rules in their requirements for
people
.
For instance
,
people
 must know at least two or three foreign
languages
 to create the application for their company.
Moreover
,
people
 should choose what they will learn on their own.
For example
, if some students go to study in Spain, of course, they will learn Spanish.
To sum up
, local
languages
 will not die because it is impossible, in my mind.
People
 just should pick some of them and learn
it
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 if they will need
it
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them
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 in the future. As for
the
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English
, I think, it is one of the most crucial
languages
 so it is better to learn it
firstly
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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