The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years.
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The given diagrams illustrate a comparison analysis of shares of power sources in a notion in the two periods of time, 1995 and 2005. What stands out from the charts is that the use of gas, petrol and coal was spread widely,
whereas
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other categories had a reverse pattern. In 1995, the volume of consumption products
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as gas, petrol and coal was almost similar, with 29.3%, 29.27% and 29.80%, respectively.
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, nuclear and other varieties ranked
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,
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for 6.40% and 4.90% at the same time. Shifting to the second chart, It could be seen that the three energy products stayed at the leading places.
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that rates of using Petro went down to 19,55%, as for the rest, benchmarks of gas and coal increased slightly, making up 30,31% and 30,93%. The less used produces
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were nuclear and other,
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there were somewhat raising, with 10.10% and 9.10%.
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