You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In many countries, the cities are facing many difficulties because numerous individuals prefer moving
into
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the
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rural
areas
to living in urban
areas
. Certainly, there are many reasons why
this
issues
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happened and
this
essay will first look at the root causes before turning to the solutions.
To begin
with, the first reason why people make movement is
a
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necessity to have a good job and a high salary. Communities tend to believe that they could have a chance to work in the cities owing to the lack of employment in the
countryside
.
For example
, Jakarta is the capital city of Indonesia with
enermous
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enormous
companies
have
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built there.
Therefore
, people who
feel
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difficult to join a project in rural
areas
such
as Medan, Palembang, and Lampung decide to move
into
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Jakarta because
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of a
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a
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the
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huge chance to be
employeed
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employed
and get paid for
living
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a living
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.
Secondly
, many parents send their offspring to big cities because they have a belief that
capital
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the capital
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city has
a good qualities
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a good quality
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in education, so they encourage their youth to take college there.
However
, these situations can be reduced by providing
a large job fields
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a large job field
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in
countryside
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the countryside
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. The governments should consider
about
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the number of jobseekers in many parts of their countries
as well as
provide a prevalent quality of education.
For instance
, enhancing
the
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agriculture in rural
areas
, providing industrial developments and
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building
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a good system
in
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of
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education. The governments
also
should provide a
convenience
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public facility which
make
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they
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them
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feel have
a
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hope and will be able to survive in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
To sum up
, the movement of people to
capital
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the capital
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city
due to
the lack of chance to obtain a good life in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
Therefore
, governments should provide
a
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prevalent
facilies
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facilities
families
in many parts of their
areas
.
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