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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
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The charts depict the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, the proportion of
travel
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 and clothes declined over the period,
while
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 there was an increase in the indicator of
books
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 and
film
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/
music
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.
Although
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travel
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 ranked
first,
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it was overtaken by
film
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/
music
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 in 2013.
Initially
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, the rates of
travel
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 and clothes stood at approximately one-third and just under one-quarter respectively in 2003.
Then
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, the proportion of
travel
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 decreased by 7%, the shares of clothes
also
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 declined to 16% in 2013, and they accounted for 45
percent
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per cent
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 of the whole chart together. In 2003, the figure for
books
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 constituted 19% of the chart,
while
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 for
film
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/
music
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, it was 2% more than
books
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 which accounted for approximately a fifth of the sales. Over the next 10 years,
film
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/
music
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 and
books
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 increased and finished the period at 33% (
film
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/
music
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) and 22% (
books
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) in 2013.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, books, film, music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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