The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
The charts depict the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, the proportion of
travel
and clothes declined over the period,
while
there was an increase in the indicator of
books
and
film
/
music
.
Although
travel
ranked
first,
it was overtaken by
film
/
music
in 2013.
Initially
, the rates of
travel
and clothes stood at approximately one-third and just under one-quarter respectively in 2003.
Then
, the proportion of
travel
decreased by 7%, the shares of clothes
also
declined to 16% in 2013, and they accounted for 45
percent
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of the whole chart together. In 2003, the figure for
books
constituted 19% of the chart,
while
for
film
/
music
, it was 2% more than
books
which accounted for approximately a fifth of the sales. Over the next 10 years,
film
/
music
and
books
increased and finished the period at 33% (
film
/
music
) and 22% (
books
) in 2013.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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