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Due to advances in technology, working from home has become more popular. What are the advantages? What are the disadvantages?

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Home-based
work
 has become prevalent
due to
 developments in technology.
This
 essay discusses the merits and drawbacks of
this
 phenomenon. There are two main benefits of working from home. The first of these is that
this
work
 mode is more flexible. If someone works from home, they can make their own schedule unlike being tied to office hours in a traditional job.
For instance
, I
work
 online building websites and often
work
 at night because I find
this
 is the best
time
 I can concentrate.
Furthermore
, it saves a lot of
time
. The reason for
this
 is that less
time
 is wasted in traffic to go to an office.
Therefore
, there is more
time
 for non-
work
 activities.
However
, there are
also
 drawbacks to
this
. The most significant is that it can be difficult to be motivated.
This
 is because no boss is looking over the workers’ shoulders.
For example
, I often find I waste a lot of
time
 surfing around the Internet because nobody can see I am doing
this
. Another limitation is communication between colleagues is more challenging.
This
 is
due to
 not meeting face-to-face and having to communicate online.
This
 can lead to less effective communication and even misunderstanding of co-workers’ real intentions. In conclusion, the advantages of working from home are that there are fewer distractions and it saves
time
. The disadvantages are that it often leads to lower levels of motivation and difficulties in communication.
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Task Achievement
To improve Task Achievement, ensure that you fully address all parts of the prompt. In your essay, you touched upon the advantages and disadvantages of working from home but expanding on each point with more detailed explanations and a variety of examples will make your response more complete and comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, aim for a more logical structure in your paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details and examples, and consider using more transitional phrases to better link your ideas and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
To further boost Coherence and Cohesion, make sure your introduction and conclusion are clearly identified and fully developed. The introduction should more effectively set the stage for the discussion, and the conclusion should summarize the main points without introducing new information.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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