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The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tons, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.

The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tons, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.
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The line graph presents the atmosphere pollution, which
are
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 being released from various sources in Britain between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the highest proportion had emerged from the
Industry
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,
whereas
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 ,
Households
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 had the lowest ratio throughout the period.
To begin
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 with, the most striking feature of
this
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 graph is that in the initial term, the wind poison of
Industry
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 was around 5 million tonnes.
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, in the proceeding year, a negligible decline can be seen.In 1996, a significant decrease can be observed in air pollution, which was approximately 2.5 million tonnes.
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, wind toxin in
Industry
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 were moderately reduced in 1999 and it becomes plateaued over the following years. The remaining information in
this
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 graph is that in 1990 the total atmosphere toxic waste reached their peak,
whereas
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, transport and
households
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 had the same ratio.But in the year 1993, transport's atmosphere pollution increased by a negligible amount as compared to the
households
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.
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, the statistics for
industry
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 and transport diverged in 1996 (about 1 tonne and 0.8 tonnes, respectively).
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, both had become slightly converged in 1996.Afterwards , the data of
industry
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 and
households
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 had become diverged and the proportion of transit had become parallel with the
industry
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's data.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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