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Band 6.5

The graphs' below show basic information about employment among people with and without disabilities in a certain country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

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The given bar charts provide primary information about
people
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 who
employed
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are employed
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 with diverse levels of disabilities in a particular country.
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, there is a noticeable superiority of no disabled employees in both employment rates and average monthly salary,
while
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 the immense discrepancy is registered between severely and non-severely disabled
people
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. Looking into details,
people
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 with no disability are responsible for 90% of recruitment levels meanwhile they
also
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 head the list for regular median income. Non-severely disabled
people
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 accounted for approximately 80%, which is four times higher than severely disabled individuals. Turning to average monthly salary, severely disabled
people
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 are at the bottom of the list with almost 1,000$, which
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two times lower than no disabled
people
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. Employees who do not suffer from serious infirmity contribute
to
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just under 2,000$ to the second place. The share for
people
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 with no disability ranked first place with just over 2,000$.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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