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You are not feeling well and you cannot continue your studies at school. Write a letter to your professor. - explain the situation; - ask permission not to attend; - say what you will do to compens

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Dr. Mr Smith I hope
this
emails
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 finds you in radiant
health
 and you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to get proper information about not
to continue
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 my studies at
school
 because of my
health
. It is widely recognized that there is a significant reason why I am not feeling well. I arrived
to
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 Edinburg with my family three months ago and I was studying at
school
 in
this
 city.
However
, suddenly I have had problems
in
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 my
health
 in recent days. I mean, I am suffering from
air
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 of
this
 city and I can not breathe.
Therefore
, I have to move to another place for my
health
. The intention of revealing
this
 statement shows that I ask
you
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 permission not to attend
in
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this
school
. I know that the teachers teach all pupils very well
due to
 private
school
. Unfortunately, I have to leave there because of my
health
.
That is
 why, I compensate for your
school
. I hope
,
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 you will understand my condition. Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to replying to you soon . Yours faithfully Anne Frank
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear introduction, several body paragraphs each discussing a single point, and a conclusion to improve the logical structure of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Starting your letter with 'Dear Mr. Smith' and ending it with 'Yours faithfully, [Your Name]', ensures a proper greeting and closing which matches the formal tone expected in such correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea: the first for explaining your situation, the second for requesting permission, and the third for explaining your plan to compensate. This will increase clarity and coherence.
task achievement
To fully meet the task achievement criteria, ensure that your letter answers all parts of the prompt in detail. Provide a more specific explanation about your health issue, request permission clearly, and explain precisely how you plan to catch up with school work.
task achievement
Use a tone that is consistent with formal letter-writing. Avoid informal phrases and ensure your language is appropriately respectful and formal throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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