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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The provided line graph gives information about the variations in the total monthly cost of three types of metals in 2014.
Overall
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, the graph shows that the cost of metals, including zinc,copper,and nickel, fluctuated over the months, except in June, when there was a dramatic decline. From July to September, prices remained stable.
In contrast
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,in
December
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, most of the metals were recovered. In
January
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, the change in the price of copper was 2% and slowly decreased over the months;
however
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, from May to June, it remained steady.
Then
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 it sharply increased to 1% from July to September. The prices increased to reach almost 2% in
December
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. For the
nickle
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nickel
, it was at its highest point in
January
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 by 6% and, over time, strongly decreased to reach 1%
in
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 March to April, staying at the same level. After that, it dramatically dropped to -3% in June, which is the lowest point. From July to September, it remained constant at -1%,
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 declined to -2% in October.
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, it rose sharply to 1% from November to
December
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.
On the other hand
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, the alteration of zinc cost was only 1% in
January
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,
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 at 3% in February, and slightly
declines
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declined
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 over the next four months. In
January
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, it fell to -1%,
then
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 strongly increased from October to November until
December
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, when it reached around 2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words december, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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