The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart illustrates graduate and postgraduate

student

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students

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who are excluding full-time

work

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the UK

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after

learnign

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learning

college in 2008 . There are two bar graphs

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both

students who

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are gratuates

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gratuates

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graduates

graduated

and postgraduates

also

devides

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divides

them into four different categories

such

parttime

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part-time

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work

, voluntary

work

further

study and unemployment. It looks like

both

sudents

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students

choose

further

studing

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studying

after learning college more than other options . Almost 30000 graduates choose

further

study and postgraduates

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2725.

Other

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option is voluntary

work

which placed lowest in

both

graph

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, with 3500 and 345 people.

Part time

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work

placed

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apply

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number two after

further

study , with 17735 and 2535

both

from graduates and

postgeaduates

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postgraduates

postgraduate

. People who choose unemployment over voluntary

work

is way higher with 16235 people from graduates and 1652 from postgraduates in 2008

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

138 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

graduate/postgraduate students
full-time work
further study
part-time education
voluntary work
unemployment
travel/gap year
percentage/proportion
field of study
economic factors
trends
comparison
analysis
correlate
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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your Opinion about this?

Plagiarism in academics has become a pressing problem in many countries today. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?