The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart illustrates graduate and postgraduate

student

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students

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who are excluding full-time

work

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the UK

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after

learnign

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learning

college in 2008 . There are two bar graphs

show

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both

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students who

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are gratuates

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gratuates

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graduates

graduated

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devides

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divides

them into four different categories

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parttime

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part-time

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work

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, voluntary

work

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further

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study and unemployment. It looks like

both

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sudents

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students

choose

further

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studing

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studying

after learning college more than other options . Almost 30000 graduates choose

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study and postgraduates

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are

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2725.

Other

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option is voluntary

work

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which placed lowest in

both

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graph

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, with 3500 and 345 people.

Part time

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Part-time

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work

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placed

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apply

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number two after

further

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study , with 17735 and 2535

both

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from graduates and

postgeaduates

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postgraduates

postgraduate

. People who choose unemployment over voluntary

work

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is way higher with 16235 people from graduates and 1652 from postgraduates in 2008

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, both with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

138 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

graduate/postgraduate students
full-time work
further study
part-time education
voluntary work
unemployment
travel/gap year
percentage/proportion
field of study
economic factors
trends
comparison
analysis
correlate
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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to : -Congratulate your friend -Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. -Suggest arrangements for the visit.

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace hmans in the workplace. Why is this happening/ Do you think this will have a positive or negaative impact on society/

Families who send their children to private schools not be required to pay taxes that support the state education, to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?