Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion.
It is commonly argued by people that world-class
athletes
make good role
models
for many youngsters
whereas
others opine that they do not make good role
models
. In this
essay, I will delve into both views and express my opinion.
Many youngsters
look up to professional athletes
because of what they have achieved in the sport. However
, some athletes
are not just famed for their achievements in the sport but they are also
famous for the attitude they portray. Some athletes
have exceptional qualities like
Change preposition
apply
for example
hard work and grit which make good role
models
for young people. For instance
, football player Cristiano Ronaldo, he
is known by his teammates at his football club as ‘the machine’. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
is due to
the fact that he works tirelessly after team training in order to perfect his shooting techniques. This
makes him a wonderful example of how hard work and grit can bring you from a humble background to the world stage.
On the other side of the coin, there are also
athletes
who are a bad role
model as they misuse their wealth in such
a way that it is not just bad for him
but it could lead Correct pronoun usage
them
youngsters
who looked
up to them astray. Wrong verb form
look
For instance
, former world number one golf player Tiger Woods, not only was he known for his victories on the golf course,
he was Add the word(s)
, but
also
famed for cheating on his spouse with many mistresses. Not only did he hide his truth from his spouse but he lied to his children and that is
unacceptable to the eyes of the public. This
is an example of a bad role
mode
especially Correct your spelling
model
to
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for
youngsters
as there is a risk that they would want to follow in the same footsteps and commit the wrong doing
too.
In conclusion, I believe that professional Correct your spelling
wrongdoing
athletes
makes
good Change the verb form
make
models
for youngsters
as they exemplify qualities which can inspire others. There are some athletes
which makes
bad Change the verb form
make
role
models
however
this
is only a small proportion of the lot.Submitted by chubbybunny on
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Structure
Ensure that your essay remains neutral until the conclusion where you share your opinion. This helps maintain clarity in your discussion.
Language Use
Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Content
Excellent use of specific examples to support your points (Cristiano Ronaldo and Tiger Woods).
Structure
Clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulate the essay's argument effectively.
Task Response
You've demonstrated a strong ability to discuss both views in a balanced manner before providing your own opinion.