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Some people say that in all levels of educations, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion that
students
 from primary
schools
 and
universities
 spend more time
on
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learning theoretical material rather than
on
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studying practical
skills
. Personally, I believe that it is a valid point of view. In fact, it is supposed that educational establishments are aimed not at performing pragmatic tasks but at gaining knowledge among
students
. One more main reason is that at
schools
 and
universities
, people frequently work who are not related to practical jobs in their sphere. First of all, teachers and professors are obliged to give
students
 learning facts that they will apply in their future careers. Actually, listening to lectures and completing exercises on sheets of paper during the seminars do not provide
students
 with any sense of practical
skills
.
For example
, it is an ordinary situation among Russian
students
, when after graduating they have to find a job without some experience in their profession.
For
this
 reason, during their working life at the company, they should get special
skills
 based on knowledge that they obtained at the educational institutions.
Secondly
, in most cases, workers in the educational sphere have been teaching in
schools
 and
universities
 for many years.
Moreover
, most of them devote their whole life to science and learning facts.
Consequently
, those people can not give
students
 enough knowledge for the pragmatic part of the study.
For instance
, there are a lot of aspirants in Russian
universities
 who are hired to teach
students
.
Thus
, these people have just graduated and started teaching.
Therefore
, they do not have enough work experience to give that
skills
 to
students
.
Overall
, I agree that in
schools
 and
universities
 studying theory is spent more time than on application of facts in practice. It is related to the established principles of teaching the material and the lack of specialists in teaching positions who can share their experience with
students
.
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conclusion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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