The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the production and utilisation of power among ten nations in the year 2014.
Overall
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, China produced and consumed the highest electrical energy,
while
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Korea's Rep. was the least for both cases.
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, the amount of electricity generated by China was 5398
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,
while
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used 5322
kWh
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.
United
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States and Russia held second and third place with the
generation
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of 4099
kWh
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and 1057
kWh
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,
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and used lap 3866
kWh
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and 1038
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respectively. Japan used 856.7
kWh
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against 936.2
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production.
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, India used almost 200
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less than their actual
generation
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, which was 871
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.
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, the power produced by Canada was 618.9
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,
whereas
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499.9
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of power was transferred to use.
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, France and Brazil led to 563.2 and 530.7
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electrons,
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utilization was 462.9
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and 455.8
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respectively. Germany utilized (582.5
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) more than the
generation
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(5262nwh).
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, the difference between
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and consumption was 485-1
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and 449.5
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respectively in Korea Rep.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kwh, generation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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